Juniper # 3

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Juniper # 3

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Re: Juniper # 3

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Looks a bit more bent :-)
I would remove most of the right hand branch as it going the wrong way and fighting the movement to the left.

Is it a Cascade or a slanted ?
having the taller apex as well as the cascade branch leaves a bit of an indecision there :?:

IMHO i would remove most of the apex trunk, or bring the cascade branch back to make a shorter first branch for the Slanting tree.

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Re: Juniper # 3

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I was going for a twin trunk cascade style.

I also left as much green as I could so not to stress the tree to much.
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Re: Juniper # 3

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Did you get around to styling this one?
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Re: Juniper # 3

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This is a perfect example of what this wonderful forum represents. A chance for enthusiasts with little knowledge to ask those with great knowledge what they would do. Take some time to read what critiques you get, then before you re-shape it, just sit and look at your tree. Spin it around, tilt the pot, hold it above your eyeline, try and find what others have seen in your tree. I have found this helped me to design better trees. With time, you will see what those with great knowledge see. :2c: :2c:
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Raymond wrote:This is a perfect example of what this wonderful forum represents. A chance for enthusiasts with little knowledge to ask those with great knowledge what they would do. Take some time to read what critiques you get, then before you re-shape it, just sit and look at your tree. Spin it around, tilt the pot, hold it above your eyeline, try and find what others have seen in your tree. I have found this helped me to design better trees. With time, you will see what those with great knowledge see. :2c: :2c:
Or you can do as I do and draw a dozen virts haha :P
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Pearcy001 wrote:
Raymond wrote:This is a perfect example of what this wonderful forum represents. A chance for enthusiasts with little knowledge to ask those with great knowledge what they would do. Take some time to read what critiques you get, then before you re-shape it, just sit and look at your tree. Spin it around, tilt the pot, hold it above your eyeline, try and find what others have seen in your tree. I have found this helped me to design better trees. With time, you will see what those with great knowledge see. :2c: :2c:
Or you can do as I do and draw a dozen virts haha :P
or that... If you can draw that is...
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Raymond wrote: or that... If you can draw that is...
I fear that I may have given you the wrong impression Ray. The fact of the matter is I have about as much talent when it comes to drawing, as a 1 year old holding a crayon upside down. When I stated "draw" I merely meant that I open up paint on the computer and button mash the mouse with my forehead, I apologize for the lie that I have lived for the last 3 hours. Good luck with your decision Daluke, don't go giving your self a concussion when you try it.
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Pearcy001 wrote:
Raymond wrote: or that... If you can draw that is...
I fear that I may have given you the wrong impression Ray. The fact of the matter is I have about as much talent when it comes to drawing, as a 1 year old holding a crayon upside down. When I stated "draw" I merely meant that I open up paint on the computer and button mash the mouse with my forehead, I apologize for the lie that I have lived for the last 3 hours. Good luck with your decision Daluke, don't go giving your self a concussion when you try it.
Pearcy,
no apology required. I have the same ability as you with a crayon and less than you with a mouse! I have tried virts, but all to no avail. :palm:
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Re: Juniper # 3

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That was its major prune. I'll be bending more after he recovers
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