AusBonsai

Gday Brian. nice tree mate, Actually its a rippa. Looking at your original image and this is only from a viewers point of view I think you need some separation between the trees if you know what I mean, I think that the canopy of the little one should not intrude on the foliage pads of the of the larger tree.
Is that the front if it is, thats what I would be aiming for.
Don't forget that I am a beginner and am just trying to get a grasp on this art! Like I said "viewers point"