Hawthorn - Triple Trunk

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Re: Hawthorn - Triple Trunk

Post by Matt S »

Really nice Watto, I love Hawthorns.

I like your new composition, the trunks really dance together. The Apex's are a bit confusing but I'm sure you'll sort it out now you've decided on a new front. For me the main problem with the lower branches is that they form a bar branch that interrupts the eye's movement up the trunks. Before you remove them try taking off just the left one and maybe the middle one too. Also look at the next lowest branch of the left tree. At the moment all the lower branches (of the top half) start at the same level. Removing that left branch would break it up and give the image some negative space to flow into.

Not sure I've explained myself but regardless it's a great tree, well done.

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Re: Hawthorn - Triple Trunk

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Nice but i would like to see the third trunk or, left hand one separated from the other two a lot more. I think it would give the setting more character and create a more visual effect for the eye. The trunklines are to similar.
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Re: Hawthorn - Triple Trunk

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Matt, thanks for the ideas and I will certainly give them some serious thoughts over the next few months.
What are you doing to me Bodhi? Just when I thought I had my three ducks on the pond swimming in the same direction you chuck a rock in and make me question my decision! Now I will need to re-contemplate my previous contemplation.
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Re: Hawthorn - Triple Trunk

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Watto wrote:Matt, thanks for the ideas and I will certainly give them some serious thoughts over the next few months.
What are you doing to me Bodhi? Just when I thought I had my three ducks on the pond swimming in the same direction you chuck a rock in and make me question my decision! Now I will need to re-contemplate my previous contemplation.
It is only my eye that notices it Watto but it was pretty instant. :D Looked at it, Said to myself, nice display :o but would look better being not so uniform. Then i said to myself :whistle: How would i do it, AHHH move the left hand trunkline ;) Only my eye though and would still like the setting if you went :shake: and left it the way it is. Have i used up my emoticon quota yet. :tu:
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