I haven't commented here as I thought you had done a half decent start. Not The way I would have gone though.
You went for a taller tree than I would. What I would do now. Is wrap the main trunk in Raffia very tightly and put in some serious bends and twists. Be very careful though Squamatas have a nasty habit of separating the bark from the xylem. By the time you realise it has happend too late.
Nathen you asked for my comments. Remember it is what I would do. What you have to do is, work out if that is what you want, also can you do it ( please do not take that the wrong way ) as I said you have started in the right direction.
The thing to remember is when you are going to twist a trunk or branch do it as you go along with the wire.
Not wire the whole thing then twist that is a sure fire way of separating the bark. The other very important thing is that you wire the way you wish to twist and bend. In other words do not wire, clock wise then twist anti clock wise, all that will happen is the wire will get loose and not hold properly.
Another thing to remember is use the right size wire to do the job. An easy way to test is to bend what you wish to wire with your fore finger and thumb. If the resistance, is the same then that is the right size wire, so go to the next gage up and you will be right.
Cheers

Pup ps I hope this has helped I know my fingers ache
Edit after looking again at the pictures I notice there is not much foliage along the branches. Just at the ends. That is not a good look.
When you first start, in Bonsai you are either told or read, that foliage pointing up or down is eliminated. That is a big problem with some Junipers. Because when you do that you are left with not a lot. So what can you do about it do the twist, it goes like this. As stated before as you wire you twist the branch slowly so that the foliage pointing up or down is now coming from the sides. That way you end up with a lot fuller looking tree quicker. Also you can shorten the branches by putting bends in them, which in you case now would bring the foliage pads closer to the trunk. My fingers are aching now

Pup cheers
