I think Grant had one like this for a recent Demo.
With a formal upright I think sticking as close to the basic rules as possible is a good plan. So nothing wrong with the right, left back arrangement for the branches here.
The branches would be horizontal to sloping downwards but as you head towards the top they will gradually head more up and also be closer together. The branches will be mostly straight as the trunk is. So I would get rid of the bend you created in the branches or cut them back before the bend if it doesn't come out.
I have marked the obvious branches to remove at the moment but you must come up with a plan for a new leader before any final decision is made.
You might get away with the branch at the top left or it may move out just a little to much. There may be another branch to use or you may need to start a new leader from scratch.

Leave the tree alone for now except for taking that wire back off or bending them back to straight. After all the leaves have dropped take a few more pictures if you like to see where we can create a new leader.
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