Ledanta Virtual Competition - March 2010

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Re: Ledanta Virtual Competition - March 2010

Post by dayne »

yeah mate pick your act up your letting us all down gosh :twisted: :lol: :lol: :lol:
nah your doing well ill have a go as soon as i get some time on you last virt id go small round elegant or a lotus or may be a cresent but hey thats just me
thanks for continually having a go thats the name of the game
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Re: Ledanta Virtual Competition - March 2010

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geeeeeez greth :lol: thanks i will take that on board, when i work out how to get 3D going i will let ya know :roll: :P


i moved the scroll for pup, but i like the pot, sorry :D
marchvirt5.1..jpg

....buuuuuuuuuuutttt i did change it up for ya with a different tree and moved the suiseki :D
marchvirtforpup1.1..jpg
hope this comes up to ya standards a little more.... :P
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Re: Ledanta Virtual Competition - March 2010

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i keep looking at the first one i did, i dont know if the scroll looks right in the middle, i guess with that tree it doesnt work overly well with that suiseki etc.

i do like the option pup was talking bout with using the third entry in the setting instead, it balances better. :D


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Re: Ledanta Virtual Competition - March 2010

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I like the balance better now.
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Re: Ledanta Virtual Competition - March 2010

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I have never tried a virt before, thought it would be too difficult. But I figured somebody has to finish behind Jamie in this competition. Virts are a lot like bonsai, slowly does it and the tree gets its own way in the end anywayI learned a lot in making this attempt, others should give it a try.
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good work gerard :D i wouldnt say i have won, your tree might have more structual integrity, its just i cant see it... :lol: you need to resize it so we can see mate :D its a bit small :D
and yes time is definately all it takes with some patience, just like real bonsai just a bit quicker :D ;)


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Re: Ledanta Virtual Competition - March 2010

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Jamie wrote:geeeeeez greth :lol: thanks i will take that on board, when i work out how to get 3D going i will let ya know :roll: :P


i moved the scroll for pup, but i like the pot, sorry :D
marchvirt5.1..jpg

....buuuuuuuuuuutttt i did change it up for ya with a different tree and moved the suiseki :D
marchvirtforpup1.1..jpg
hope this comes up to ya standards a little more.... :P
That pot is fine for an informal upright but not a semi cascade.

The tree in your second try is moving the wrong way for the display,you need more height in the tokonoma. Small things but when it comes to display it is the small things that count to the over all. Remember you are trying to create a scene.
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Re: Ledanta Virtual Competition - March 2010

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cool pup, take three :D :roll: :lol:
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better? or do we need something a little different again? i know it is the scene we are trying to show, just never done one let alone virted one, thought it would be something different, now i want it right :D

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Re: Ledanta Virtual Competition - March 2010

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Jamie wrote:cool pup, take three :D :roll: :lol:
marchtake3virt.jpg
better? or do we need something a little different again? i know it is the scene we are trying to show, just never done one let alone virted one, thought it would be something different, now i want it right :D

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Much betteraa :lol:

That is a lot better if you play around you will find as I do it is very pleasing when you get it right. The elements you have are all good. Just remember the tree is the focal point so it must be dominant.
Then the subsidiaries are placed.
You did make it hard on yourself when you chose a scroll that had a person. What you must not do, is repeat the the items.
Such as the tree should not be in the scroll or if you have a suiseki mountain or as in this case a waterfall do not have that in the scroll. If your tree is flowering no flowering accent.
Cheers :) Pup
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Re: Ledanta Virtual Competition - March 2010

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cheers pup :D im happy now i got it right, or bettera anyways :lol: :D ;)

i get what ya saying bout that, i even paid the attention of the scroll so the lady was looking at the tree, but at least it didnt conflict with the tree or the suiseki :D so i fluked that one :lol:


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Re: Ledanta Virtual Competition - March 2010

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Jamie wrote:... take three :D :roll: :lol:
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jamie :D
I like this last virtual design of yours the most, but they are all pretty workable I think.
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Re: Ledanta Virtual Competition - March 2010

Post by Si Van Nguyen »

I like this tree, especially this side view.
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Here's my thumbnail sketch of how I see it from this angle. I took some artistic liberty with that long apical-cascading branch. I think the tree needs some more curves up top to distract from the long straight section in the middle.
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Re: Ledanta Virtual Competition - March 2010

Post by Jamie »

beautiful design there si :D

there are so many options for this tree, it just needs to be seen :D

thanks for the compliment si! :D


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Re: Ledanta Virtual Competition - March 2010

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Jamie wrote: thanks for the compliment si! :D


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You are quite welcomed Jamie. You put in a lot of work on your computer virtual there mate. To me, because of the lack of taper, this tree should be a bunjin style, somehow, unless one chop it down and start over again.
Good day Jamie :)
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Re: Ledanta Virtual Competition - March 2010

Post by Jamie »

i can see exactly what you mean mate ;) there was one entry there that i was going to do it literati but it didnt look right with the straight section of the trunk so i used a canopy of pads to cover it as much as possible :D

good day to you too sir :D

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