Blaauws Raft

Leigh Taafe · Post by **Leigh Taafe** » April 29th, 2009, 1:40 pm

Here is another one for critique - get into it!

Dont hold back!

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Post by **kcpoole** » April 29th, 2009, 2:30 pm

Teh two trees 2nd and 3rd from the right need some movement to match the others. Every other tree has a bent trunk but these 2 stick out like a sore thumb.

the other problem I see is that there is no definition in the canopies of each tree. I like to see each trees canopy of foliage defined more along the top of the group or against each other. The foliage has been allowed to blend into one large mass with little shape to each tree

Ken

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